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- Hope is a flying kite
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- Hope is a glowing fire – final draft
- Hope is a hot air balloon
- Hope is a raging dragon
- Hope is a star in the sky
- Hope is a thing with a tail
- Hope is a twinkling star
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- Hope is the candles in darkness
- Hope is the man in Camo
- Hope is the sparkling star
- Hope is the thing
- Hope is the thing like petals
- Hope is the thing that drifts
- Hope is the thing that flutters
- Hope is the thing with brightness
- Hope is the thing with brightness
- Hope is the thing with petals
- Hope is the thing with petals – Sam
- Hope is the thing with smallest wings
- Hope is the thing with smallest wings – final draft
- Hope is the thing with thrusters
- Hope’s the circle
- The colour called red
- English Assessment
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- How to make a book
- The 30 Day Challenge
- What does hope look like?
- What does hope sound like?
- “Hope” is the thing with feathers
- 8E’s poetry
8E 
This is successful because you kept returning to your poem to improve it – even when you didn’t want to! You have used the same structure as Dickinson – 3 verses with 4 lines. You have used the metaphor of lights to show how hope can brighten the darkest times. I liked your use of ‘city’ which suggests a more modern atmosphere than the original. My suggestion for improvements are to take another look at the rhyme and rhythm of the original to check your patterns.